Jocelyn Adams, author of The Glass Man
The amazing Jocelyn Adams has issued me and four others a challenge!
Here’s the challenge (which I will extend to five fellow authors below): Find the LOOKs in your current WIPs AND post the paragraphs around the word. Choose your favorite THREE in your WIP to post.
Aha! Someone is trying to catch us telling and not showing! Bring it!
I had 7 “Look” or derivative instances in my 9000 word in-process draft of Purely Relative, a novella sequel to The PURE, so annualized / novelized / run rate to completion-ized, that would be about 40 in a 60k novel. Not too bad.
Here are my three (3) paragraphs:
We walked in without announcing our arrival, the middle child needing no invitation to enter his boyhood home. The living room greeted us first, a soaring room of pristine white—white carpet, white sofa, white chairs and a massive portrait of the family all dressed in, of course, white. Jon didn’t look much younger than his current age in it.
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I assessed Jenny next hoping to catch a peek at her ring finger. Dark hair and dark eyes like Jon, she was a much taller version of her mother, much, much taller. Mr. and Mrs. Cripps sure did make pretty babies. Wonder what Jon’s and my babies would look like?
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Rising up, I caught sight of myself in the mirror. “Don’t give me that look. Everybody does it. How was I to know the thing was booby trapped,” I said to the disapproving twin in the mirror. She shook her head, prompting a niggle of shame to ripple through.
Now to throw down the gauntlet to five other authors:
Sandra Bunino
Jennifer Eaton
Terri Rochenski
SLytle
Jen Keller-Ford
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Jennifer M Eaton
September 28, 2012 at 8:11 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Ugh! Okay… Ill do it because you’re YOU
I should really check on this anyway
Sandra Bunino (@SandraBunino)
September 28, 2012 at 10:50 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Aaagghh! I had two in the same paragraph! Yikes. *edit edit edit*
Isn’t there a pretty little button for this meme? You know how I LOVE pretty buttons.
Claire Gillian
September 28, 2012 at 10:54 AM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
I’m already seeing edits that are needed when I re-read my 3 paragraphs. Bleh!!
We DO need a meme graphic. I’ll try to find one PDQ.
emaginette
September 29, 2012 at 1:18 PM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
I don’t see any telling here. I wish I could say that. Got caught using the word ‘feel’ the other day. Ouch, but I gotta learn.
Look! Look! – A writer’s challenge! | J. Keller Ford ~ YA Fantasy Author
October 9, 2012 at 9:17 PM (UTC -7) Link to this comment
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