#SixSentence — The Sweetest Song

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Welcome to “Six Sentence Sunday”. Thank you for visiting and especially for any comments.

This six comes from a love story I’m currently working on (just finished first draft last night!) about a siren named Circe who’s down to her last chance to shipwreck a halibut fishing vessel in the frigid waters near Homer, Alaska. Think Deadliest Catch meets The Odyssey.

The story is told from the alternating points of view of Circe and Otis, the wily captain of the Calypso.

As a lead in, Circe has decided to stalk Captain Otis to figure out why he’s been able to withstand her siren’s song.  When they meet, not only does he not recognize Circe, but he flirts with her and asks her out for coffee at the Lotus Eater’s Cafe. Unable to speak for fear of betraying her otherworldly voice, Circe uses sign language.  When Otis is able to understand and sign back, she discovers the root of her problem—her handsome nemesis is deaf.

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A warmth originating where they touched snaked up her arm and pooled in her heart, her lungs, her belly, before trickling into her other limbs.

When he finally released her hand it was to ask, “What do you do, Circe who wrestles unsuspecting book racks in public libraries?”

A wicked twist of her lips had her signing, “I’m a singer.”

Otis laughed, showing his teeth, perfectly straight and white.  Beautiful.  The sound of his laughter, though closer to the barking of a seal than a hearing human, tugged the edges of her mouth into a broader smile.

Aww, sweet, or has Circe’s discovery given her the upper hand?

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26 thoughts on “#SixSentence — The Sweetest Song

  1. Very nice, Claire. How’s the whole sign language going for you in this WIP? I’d imagine it’s not much different to normal dialogue, except it’s made clear that it’s signed, but still, it must be a challenge to remember that. 🙂

  2. Ooo! Most intriguing, I love the concept and the way you illustrated this scene, well, I could imagine her hands and fingers moving gracefully to communicate with Otis. Nice six! 🙂

  3. I like this story idea, Claire. The siren, luring the wily captain to his fate but possibly falling for him a bit along the way? Mythology combined with the Deadliest Catch is a great thriller and I like the Alaska setting. Endless and sexy possibilities here. Like her reactions to touching him and hearing his laugh, too. Great six C!

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  5. I have a friend who has written a book where the main character is deaf and it’s not the same a writing regular dialogue. Depending on who is listening, or recieving the signs, it can be choppy and awkward. Good, luck, it won’t be easy but from what I’ve read so far, you’re managing just fine.
    Oh, and I absolutely LOVE the premise!

    What a GREAT name for the bar, the Lotus Eaters. I love subtle little hints and tips like that.

    • Thanks Dale. I’m using regular dialogue for the most part but using “signed” instead of “said” where a tag is even needed. I’ve tried to put the reader in the mindset of the 2 characters who are both using sign language with each other, with neither speaking, sort of attempting to bury the reader in the conversation enough to where the awkwardness of signing doesn’t really come into play. Where it does gets tough, however, is adding physical movement that’s NOT signing and remembering that they have to be facing each other with their hands free, for the most part. So, no whispered sweet nothings in the ear. She has to touch him if he’s not looking at her to get his attention. She, on the other hand is able to hear, she just can’t (won’t) speak. He can speak but chooses not to with her since she knows sign language, but occasionally he does talk–to non-signers and to get her attention if she’s a distance away from him with her back turned. Sorry to go on and on here. It really is like I told JAB above, a whole different kind of POV issue to fret over.

      ETA: And thanks for noticing my little details. I LOVE my “easter eggs” and am thrilled when people “get” them.

      • I was in DC one time and on a subway car with a whole bunch of Gallaudet students. They were all having these really intense conversations with each other, signing away at a wondrous speed. The body language, the facial expressions were all part of the conversation. Sign is perhaps the world’s most beautiful, expressive and intense language.

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