My eight sentences for Weekend Writing Warriors this week come from my WIP, His Acadian Lady that I’m currently polishing up for submission.
Here’s a little bit of early relationship banter between the heroine, Lydia, and hero, Paul:
“Red sky at night,” Paul began.
“Sailors take fright.”
Paul shot her a wry glance. “You’ve got it backwards.”
Lydia smiled to herself. “I don’t think so. It’s red skies at night, sailors take fright, red skies at dawn, troubles be gone.”
A chuckle and shake of his head greeted her attempt to tug on his leg.
Heh! Paul’s right. It’s “Red sky at night, sailor’s delight. Red sky at morning, sailors take warning.”
More from this story in the weeks ahead! Got a nibble on a toe-in-the-water submission already. Not holding my breath on it, but you never know, and it does tell me that perhaps the query is not too bad. 😉 This is the one I used. It’s obviously still a work in process:
An all expenses paid trans-Atlantic cruise from New Orleans to Rome has romance written all over it…unless you’re the poor employee who has to audit the last time someone cleaned the toilets or how fast-moving the cafeteria lines are.
When Lydia Johnson, quality control manager at J. P. Theriot Enterprises is tapped to do the job typically done by lower level staff, she’s not buying that it’s because the head of the company only wants “the best”. If that were the case, she wouldn’t be saddled with an untrained assistant.
Paul Thomas may be new to secret shopping aboard The Acadian Lady, but he certainly knows his way around the ship and especially its casino. He’s also not the least bit shy about expressing his frank appreciation for his ambitious manager. The Cajun charmer is tempting to Lydia’s self-control, but he could also be a spy sent to test her seaworthiness as a manager.
One thing is for certain: Paul has never given up on anything he wants and right now what he wants is the woman who knows more about him than any other … except who he really is–J. P. Theriot.
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Lots of fun stops so far.
There’s actually a reason behind it.
Yes, I’m sure there is, probably atmospheric trouble ahead vs. a foreboding looking but innocuous sunset.
Awe, this is such cute banter! I like it, Claire 🙂
Thank you, Teresa! 🙂
Fun scene–your 8 is cute and makes me want to know these 2 characters better. Good job, Claire!
Thanks, Nan. They have some pretty nice chemistry which made them a lot of fun.
Too cute. Loving seeing characters all natural and comfortable with each other. Great snippet.
Thanks. Yes. I’ve always found ease of conversation a good omen for better things ahead. Get that communication obstacle **mostly** tackled early on.
Interesting story premise and enjoyed the excerpt today!
THank you, Veronica! 🙂
Fun banter…love the teasing.
Thanks, Millie. Banter is my favorite part of writing. 🙂
Clever exchange that seems really natural. I can see hubs and I correcting each other over the correct lines of an old saying.
I think my hubs and I have probably had this same conversation or one almost identical to it many times in our 20+ yrs together. Write what you know, eh? Thanks, Gem!
Excellent banter. What happens next? I want more. Good writing, Claire.
Oh, lots and lots, Charmaine, and more to come in the weeks ahead! THank you!!
Love the banter. They’ve got great chemistry! Good luck with it.
Thank you, Jennifer. This couple has been so much fun to write.
Great banter indeed.
Thanks for visiting and for the nice comment, Stevie.
I always enjoy writing –or reading– a good banter. Yours is really nice!
Thanks, Aheila! So good to “see” you.
Love the dialogue! Great use of the 8’s, Claire.
Thank you, J. A.! Appreciate the kind words.
very cute. I like the sense of teasing between them and how sassy she seems
Thanks, Michelle! Lydia is quite strong-minded. She’s the boss, so she’s walking a fine line between remaining in charge and being approachable / friendly. Guess which side she ultimately flops over onto? 😉
He is right! She does have it backwards. I like their exchange, very light and happy.
Yes, totally backwards. That’s part my doing because I often get it backwards, had to look it up for this scene, actually. LOL THanks for visiting me.
Paul might be right but she has a nice variation for it.
Lol Cute 8 Claire! 🙂